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    dots Submission Name: RE: Long Lostdots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 103/139/48
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Venting
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       I was going to re-edit my poem, but then I realized that it would be stupid.


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    dotsRE: Long Lostdots
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    The eye is the window to the soul, some say.
    Then why is it that looking into someone's eyes can be so decieving?

    Why do people fall in love, to fall out in a painful heartbreak? Why is it that men and women put themselves through such pain and try to get back into it again... Is it lonelyness? Is it stupidity?

    I will never know why I long so much for my ex girlfriend who was really never mine to begin with. I though that God put her in my life, for the rest of my life. I was wrong, now I must admit my faults. I can never have with her what we once had, for a short time.

    Now she says that God put another man in her life and i wonder... will it end the same? Because apparently she didnt accept the fact that I wanted to spend the rest of my life with her.

    Maybe God does have something in mind for her. Perhaps it will end the way I am guessing it will... perhaps not. Maybe this is the dream of her life and I was meant to live on for another woman. I just dont get why man is so stupid to fall into the pits that they dug for the next unsuspecting Joe, but instead they fall into it themselves.

    This used to be a poem, but then I realized that its not what it was meant to be. I should have just come strait out and said it the first time... you think?




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      I love how you pour yourself out in this, it really shows the true you. I admire how vulnerable you make yourself in this, opening yourself to show the torn soul inside. Love is simply a word chosen for a feeling. You'll know when God has sent you your mate, the one that lives and breathes his work, the one that was made in his own divine creation....just for you. Patience, and that word will become your life, it will flourish and grow in the way it was meant to be. Love will be your stepping stone to what forever brings in the arms of your chosen one.

    It will come for you, until then, pray....and breathe. Have faith.


    Thank you for touching me, and bringing out the me that inspires.

    Sorrel
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      Some possible answers to your burning questions:

    1. Maybe because the soul that you are looking into is a soul of deception?

    2. Because love hurts, man. Nothing is more deceitful and carnal and mortal and finite than the human heart, and to irrevocably attach yourself to another's', which is human nature, is asking for heart break.

    3. Yes, precisely! It is loneliness and stupidity both! Humans seems to have a self destructive mechanism installed deep within us!
    Some love drama, some are stubborn, some can't let go...being no less human than you, I can't really solve that one.

    4. Who knows? We all think the first crush is love...until we find another that is more intense..and then learn that that was no more than just another crush. Than we move onto infatuation...and puppy love...and young love..and true love. Perhaps what separates young love from true love is fate. Some are meant to be together, some aren't, despite however deeply they may feel for each other.

    Again, who knows? We do things on our own volition. Maybe some people are brought together by God, and maybe some we just pick out for ourselves. Me, I would opt for the former. You just have to trust in fate. and remember, you still have the rest of your life ahead of you! Just be happy to be alive in a definate universe!

    "They have dug a pit before me; into the midst of it they themselves have fallen."
    Psalm 57 v.6:b

    Interesting point there.


    And lastly, yes, I do think these mortal ramblings are much better said straight forward than tangled in a web of confused and desperate verse.
    Good job, and good luck.

    peace

    ~???~
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Question Mark | [ Reply to This ]
      dude, I LOVE THIS...the beginning is just, awesome...decieving windows to the soul... i really can't put into words how much i love that.

    the only thing that just kinda sticks out to me that i didn't really like is when you call the next guy a bozo ...that word just doesn't seem to fit in...maybe something like "the next lucky grave digger" because where you wonder if the next guy will end the same way you did...know what i mean?

    anyway, awesome vent
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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