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    dots Submission Name: Platinum Blondedots
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    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 304
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 548



    Description:
       Something edgy about the heighday of Hollywood glamour and sex.


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    dotsPlatinum Blondedots
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    Jean Harlow wraps plastic film
    around my body
    in a play on words --
    Underwear makes me uncomfortable,
    and besides,
    my parts have to breathe.

    I am erotic and edible,
    disposable and deceased,
    I am her whim and her phase --
    This place certainly
    reeks of hospitality
    and good cheer,
    or maybe it’s this cheese.

    She likes to wake up
    each morning
    feeling a new man --
    When you lie down with dogs
    you get up with fleas.




    Submitted on 2006-03-14 14:45:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I got the feeling you were mocking Hollywood with this one. The old time glam still was as bad as the barely dressed stralettes of today. And sex sells. Using Jean Harlow as a metaphor depicts how far back this tramping goes. I liked the message but was not to fond of the poem due to stanza #2. It kinda threw me off a bit. But over all this was very good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, once again you can't make up your mind whether to bite or kiss...

    Neat little opener, I liked all the first stanza, in the second, I reckon "phase' could do with a makeover.

    The third is what I don't understand, unless you're asking yourself why you have this obsession for an old has-been slut? If so, i get it, otherwise, i dunno why yu changed tack.

    Still good, and I may have it wrong (it's been known to happen) lol

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice humor here. You do a good job, and I like the juxtaposition of Harlow with fleas. Nothing I'd change here. Good work!

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Good one! Had some interesting humor to it and the moral in the last stanza was put in a superb-in-your-face grungy truth.

    Nice and edgy write. Yeah, guys arent the only ones that bounce from bed to bed. Hee-hee!
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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