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What He Thinks

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 191
Class/Type: Poetry /You left me
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Last night I went to a friends party and my best friend Matt was there and he got really jealous because I had moved on and I was with my b/f..And well when I got home I wrote a poem from his perspective about how he felt and what he thought during the night..Hope you like it

What He Thinks

These little mind games
You play with me
Must signify that you don't love me
Like back when,when we used to be
And all you could think about was
That we were meant to be
And now you tell me to move on
That I just wasn't the one
But damn girl you just don't understand
That my love for you is inflicted
By your command
When ever you walk by or stare into my eyes
I can't help but think that
I'm trapped in this lie
A world where I am free to believe
That things will always be the same
Between you and me
But baby girl this is how it ends
All you want to be now is friends
That doesn't cut it for me though
The sound of your voice
The look of your face will always led me to believe
That I'm living for something
That will never be
In the end I always reminace about those days
The days we used to be happy and carefree
And this is what I felt the night
I layed there and looked in your eyes

Submitted on 2006-03-14 18:43:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ITs interesting to here one side of the story. I can only imagine how far off you really are.. Ha. Im joking, but at the same time, maybe he is playing a game with you. ? For you to write or vent whichever fits, about him symbolizes something.
the post had simple good rhymes, with a better flow. IF anything these lyrics were creative.

| Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really good I liked how u made it from his point of view. I really liked the ending. I know how he has felt one to many times, and it's really painful. Once again I don't really like the use of Boy or girl in the poems, but it's your thing, and also like I said try ot be more desctiptive in your feelings make them a methaphor or similie (I can't spell) but it was a good poem and I'm glad it was more then 100 words there's not much more you could add ot it keep it up

| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

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