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    dots Submission Name: Painful Confusiondots
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    Author: Poetic Cure
    ASL Info:    49.f.mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 313/137/33
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 199
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 793



    Description:
       My stepdaughter turned on me. I do not know why. She called me mom and now she hates me. Dont understand why? She does not want anything to do with me or her dad.


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    dotsPainful Confusiondots
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    She used to call me mom
    no longer does she call.

    I loved her as my own
    no longer does she want.

    The love I so loving gave
    discarded and tossed away.

    My heart breaking into tiny pieces
    blowing away in the wind,
    like ashes floating aimlessly
    from a roaring fire furiously out of control.

    My mind so lost in the maze of words
    processed from her confusion of reality.

    Pain roaming, stabbing all who is involved.
    No one untouched by by its passing blade.

    Blood dripping slowly,
    leaving a small stream
    following the shadows of broken hearts.

    Where will this end?

    When will this end?






    Submitted on 2006-03-14 20:25:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not quite sure what to say about the poem. I think its a great freestyle poem and I really think I get it. I know I can't relate though, cause' i'm only fifteen. THough, somehow it made me think because my mom said she would marry her boyfriend if he asked her ..then that would mean I would have a stepdad...somehow i'm already turning because I still yet can't stand the thought of my mom loving someone other than my dad, they only got divorced in august. It doesn't seem like long enough to me.
    Ahh, i'm sorry, i just spilled out my feelings to you. ha. I like your poem a lot. good job!
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]



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