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Waiting


Author: Kaila Turley
ASL Info:    15/F
Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 52 /43 /18
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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this isnt suppoused to rhyme i just had to tell everything i was feeling so i done it this way


Waiting



here i am waiting,
for you to see,
just how much you mean to me,
and how great everything,
used to be,
i wish many things were different,
i love you with all of my heart,
cant you see?

here i am waiting,
to see what will become,
will we grow together,
or change like the path of a tear?,
my heart will be yours,
forever until i am here no more.

here i am waiting 2.5 months later,
still feeling the same as i did,
nothings changed with me,
as far as you go,
hell who knows

here i am waiting ,
for a call, text, message, a heart,
anything to show you still care,
should i keep waiting,
or will it get me anywhere?




Submitted on 2006-03-14 20:53:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is very good. I knwo exactly how it feels to wait on someone that isn't there for you ( still waiting). You know I don't like the rhyme thing but it went well with this poem. I really hope things end for the best, weather you two get together or not u knwo I'll be here to listen to your problems or your joys. Keep writing Kawa love ya lady
xoxo
=Logan=
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  i like how it shows you really care for them but you are befuddled.
i like the line "for a call, text, message, a heart,"
thats kinda like my bf and i. i waited for that too. i wish it were longer itd be so amazing
| Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by G unit jeanne | [ Reply to This ]


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