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    dots Submission Name: Damage is donedots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 647



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       this one was okay. i know it could use some work.


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    dotsDamage is donedots
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    i'm a liar.
    and a thief.
    i'm misguided.
    i sold my soul cheap.

    everytime i let you down
    I felt the weight of you.
    disapointment lies heavy*
    & don't think i have forgotten
    so easily

    my past is always waiting
    right behind me.
    i've been so caught up
    by my own way
    & theres nobody left
    beside me.
    desperation lies heavy*

    i'm so tired.
    i can't sleep.
    open up my eager eyes,
    there is light at the
    end of this.
    There has got to be.




    Submitted on 2006-03-15 03:26:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the form of this piece, and the words you've chosen. I especially love the last paragraph, it crowns the whole poem. This has emotion, take care!
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by bloodspell | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. This is the way you should be thinking! See, I knew there was hope somewhere inside of you! You will make it if you don't give up! Stay strong! Love ya
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]


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