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    dots Submission Name: Time's Tyrannydots
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    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this when I was bored during a free period in school.


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    dotsTime's Tyrannydots
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    Time visits and departs so quickly
    That you can never bid it farewell
    With time, the one who is sprightly
    Will be feeble and not at all well.

    Time slithers by like a serpent
    And doesn’t give you a chance
    You remain its unwilling servant
    While it never gives you a second glance.

    Time is being that at will
    Can make kings bow in reverence
    It can cause the heart to be still
    And shake the soul’s confidence.




    Submitted on 2006-03-15 11:15:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done & I liked the 3 stanzas - as if you must quickly get it down because time is flying by - concise yet clear and true, we have become slaves to clocks but if we stop & appreciate "IT" then time doesn't really matter for "IT" goes on & on
    great!
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    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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