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    dots Submission Name: Worthless broken girldots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWorthless broken girldots
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    Why must I prove my love to you? Why don't you trust me? Why don't you believe that I'd do anything for you? I cry the deepest ocean when you make me hurt. I bleed reddest blood when I cut thinking of you. I won't eat for weeks when I'm broken because of you. I lie there in shadow of you I feel worthless. Why must you be so jealous? No other guy ammounts to you. I fucking love you! Can you not see that?




    Submitted on 2006-03-15 13:57:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, well, that sounds convincing! (If you want to scare the poor dude to death) But otherwise, its definately an expressive write! I think you did an awesome job on it! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by mistress acaia | [ Reply to This ]
      well i think you might want to put this on a blog somewhere...im not sure if it belongs here, but then again im an idiot. but its too first person story telling. Like you are just speaking words with no real emotion behind them, just confused feelings
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by goveiac | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! this sounds familiar sounds liek you have really expressed yourself nice!
    sounds like you are really down but just keep looking!
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Mr R | [ Reply to This ]


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