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    dots Submission Name: Optimismdots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    19/m/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 111/84/44
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 993



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       The name is on purpose trust me... One of my earlier writes...


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    dotsOptimismdots
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    Tables get turned, at the worst times,
    People get burned, without a sign,

    And there's a fine line, between love and hate,
    Nothing is ever fine, when it's in the hands of Fate,

    And why do they send, in my time of need,
    The short end, to make me sweat and bleed,

    Why is the grass greener, on the other side,
    I guess that's his demeanor, or maybe my questions just collide,

    With the big picture, that I'm trying so hard to get,
    But it seems like my whole life is already pre-set,

    And I keep looking to the skies, and looking at the ground,
    But it seems like lies, are the only things I've found,

    So who knows whether the cup is half full or empty,
    And why do I want everything the devil uses to tempt me,

    Evidently I am alone on the quest for answers,
    And this robot way of thinking is spreading like cancer...




    Submitted on 2006-03-15 15:17:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is pretty good, i can definately relate to the feelings the poem coveys, but try not to rhyme to hard, the reader gets to caught up in expecting the rhyme and loses the poem. but i like the idea of the rhyming its always fun to try that with poetry.

    And i agree with the comment above me, it seems more pessimistic than optimistic, or was that the entire point?
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ehrickah | [ Reply to This ]
      This is how I feel too, so much of the time. Questions without answers. Longings for things that have always been "bad" in my mind. More downs than ups. I like the ideas overall. I'm a bit confused where the lines get a little longer towards the middle/end - was that done on purpose? Also, the title doesn't seem to fit the attitude of the poem. The theme seems more skepticism, or pessimism. Anyway, bravo!
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by ALittleBitCrazy | [ Reply to This ]



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