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    dots Submission Name: sir jack, duchess hack, mr zombiedots

    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 920
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       the beat is awkward unless you can hear me read it, but im a writer not a reader...some parts might make you think what the hell is she trying to say, but i got out exactly what i intended to say

    btw title has everything to do with the poem, but you wouldnt see that, mr zombie yes

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    dotssir jack, duchess hack, mr zombiedots

    Donít know why itís kind of depressing
    To see him crawling out on a ledge
    With the rain beating down and killing his soul
    Killing it cold
    Running and heís running through the storm
    Arriving just in time to die
    And here is to me
    Dancing like a fool
    Such the little fool
    Talking with a monster that would as soon as kill
    Like the sun will always sting your eye

    To see his hair turn from brown
    To a burnt ash color in a matter of days
    By taking my life into his heart
    Caring for me
    Only for me
    And here I am laughing and smiling
    Crying with and loving this monster
    Cutting at his throat
    With my nails
    Letting his blood bleed for me

    Singing a sad song when she dies
    But loving another while he perishes
    I think its kind of funny
    Very funny
    How he goes out of the way
    The way around the world
    To come back to nothing
    Someone who will be nothing
    Because he is nothing for her

    Sucking at the monsters chest
    While its whores bite back at his ass
    Seeing him and hearing him tear apart
    I can hear the rips

    Donít you want to know why
    Should I tell you why
    Probably shouldnít tell you why
    So I will

    Submitted on 2006-03-15 15:45:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think its kind of funny
    Very funny
    How he goes out of the way
    The way around the world
    To come back to nothing
    Someone who will be nothing
    Because he is nothing for her

    I love this part. I don't know what to say about this. I think it's morbid, but beautiful in it's darkness. I think it's fabulous! I hope to read more like it soon!
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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