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    dots Submission Name: Watching from the Windowdots

    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       The other night there was a great storm, and I stayed up all night watching it. It was so beautiful. I don't think I will ever in my life forget that storm.

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    dotsWatching from the Windowdots

    Awakened by the sounds of storms
    Lightening making and breaking forms
    Clouds highlighted by brightened sky
    Rolling thunder grunts a reply
    Bedside clock reads 1:42
    The sky reflects its red-orange hue
    The sleeping household does not see
    The storm's remarkable beauty
    Sitting beneath the left window
    Bookshelves and dresser softly glow
    In momentary sparks of light
    Continues on all through the night
    Awake and watching Nature's play
    The rain and shattered light's array
    Never bored with all the action
    5 a.m. - sleep and satisfaction

    Submitted on 2006-03-15 22:47:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this flowed so well and described so much. i, too, LoVe storms! especially at night...they're only worth it at night. with the sky...lightening...AH! :) its just so nice. so obviously, i really enjoyed this write and i think your feelings towards the storm and its beauty that so few notice was expressed beautifully. bravo!
    take care
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]
      A very descriptive poem with a sense of timing. You let the reader experience all the sights and sounds with your word pictures. a wonderful piece of story-telling.
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      I like watching nature at play too,and yes it is satisfying,in line five you have a small typo that would help if corrected I think you meant bed clock not beside clock, but other then that I thought this a a rather good write it read with a nice feeling to it,good job keep tapping those keys
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]

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