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    dots Submission Name: Just Like Youdots
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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 767



    Description:
       I wrote this a long time ago. This one shows my fighter side as well. So young and bold, but you'll have to forgive me unimaginative expression of self confidence. Tee hee.


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    dotsJust Like Youdots
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    Look in the mirror before you judge me
    You may be surprised by what you see
    You'd see that I am just like you
    I wish you could, but you're not going to

    You don't really know who I am
    Walk the world in my shoes
    Then hate me if you still can
    Step back and see the world through my eyes

    Fix yourself before you try to change me
    My style reflects who I want to be
    You'll cry a river before I shed a tear
    Stop trying to hurt me with words I can't hear

    Can't you see I've blocked you out?
    You can't break in, I'm stone cold now
    No iron fist can knock me down
    I am who I am, nothing will change that.




    Submitted on 2006-03-15 22:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very strong statements here.
    Though it does appear as your everyday "teen" poetry, it is very direct, almost as if towards one person rather than the world like most others.
    The spelling and grammar seems flawless though I am no English major.
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Jodans | [ Reply to This ]


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