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Dedicated to Eric

Author: POETRY
ASL Info:    17/f/az
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Well this is for a guy named eric me and him...well at least I thought were in love. He waited for me to long to make my descion and he decided to just move on. Im hurt but if it makes him happy to be with this girl he is with now....then ya for him. He deserves to be happy. Really.....Eric if your reading this I give best wishes to you and I hope you will find it in your heart to forgive me for the pain I put you through

Dedicated to Eric

I waited too long to say how I really feel
and now he doesnt even know I am here
Hes moved on which apart of me always knew he would do
But I guess I thought we'd always be after everything we've been through.
I was lingered to another guy
And my feelings for him as well as for eric just wouldnt die.
He told me he would wait for me until I was ready,
That he would take things slow and steady.
I guess he couldnt wait for me no longer
yet day after day my feelings grow stronger.
It hurt when I was reading his journal
He said how he was moving in with his girlfriend,
because everything he is going through she can help mend.
I am glad he has a girl that can be there for him, and help him through what he is going through,
But something in me always said that would of been me.
What hurt the most is I wrote a long letter, telling him I am sorry, I love him and the response I got back was something I didnt want....
"Its nice to hear from you, Welcome back"
It broke my heart in a thousand pieces
Becaus eafter all I thought I would get something more discent.
But I guess I don't deserve to have a beautiful man like him.
So Eric from mine to your lips,
I will simply say "I am always here to stay and
no matter what I will always love you til my dying days...(muah)!"

Submitted on 2006-03-16 13:13:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ...Wow..That's all I can say. This is an amazing one an I loved it alot. You told me alot with your words and I distinctly loved them. Maybe you can leave me a comment on my FEW things I got.
| Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by Darkestlove | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is good and has alot of promise. i think though that you should fix all the wording that doesn't quite flow as well as the gram. errors. another thing, try to add more words that help define a little more sharply how it feels. all in all its really good but i do see how it could be great pretty easily.
| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by reluctant_hero | [ Reply to This ]
  hey wats up? I feel so bad right now but its just that i thought you forgot about me and moved on...thats all...I really like the poem thought its really nice, but i still feel bad for doing that to you...and it made me actually think that instead of being your night in shining armor i become the souless [censored] srry...its just been way to long almost 3months i think...if you want to still go to the ball drop this year you can still come as long as you don't mind my girlfriend coming...well gtg ttyl
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
  It's a very beautiful poem, though you last exclamation seems to tear away from the overall mood. And i think, you're trying to say decent. I like how the peom goes into to rhyme and subtly breaks away from it again, it just builds on to the emotion.

To tell the truth, I know how feel...
I came up against the same situation...
| Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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