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    dots Submission Name: Where Angels Playdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1174
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    Description:
       Love Life & stop & play with the angels

    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif


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    dotsWhere Angels Playdots
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    Soar with me
    2 Heaven
    "IT's" just right
    up the street

    where winged Angels
    gather to play ~*~
    by the pond
    is where they
    meet

    Unfurl your wings
    & stay awhile
    "IT's" the
    perfect
    day 2
    sail
    Across
    the open
    waters up
    over hill
    & dale

    As sun
    is setting
    rays
    do race
    the moon

    Shhh....
    the sky
    is singing
    listen to
    "IT" croon

    All is
    quiet evening
    what a wonderful
    day
    Hanging with
    the Angels
    where the Angels
    play













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      this was sick. it has sweet imagery and such an innocent playfullness to it with out it being childlike. The picture deffinately sets the mood for the reader. the only thing i could think to add is maybe a part 2, so to speak about the angels actually playing, this was tight, thanx for a great read
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this one, very dreamy.It had a nice feel to it.

    One little thingl.... I hate the text language, replacing 'to' with 2, just (for me) cheapened what was a beautiful write... but thats a personal thing, i love language and do think it's getting ruined with all this text slang.

    Christ I sound old!!


    Take care
    Debbie
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by cerberus74 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem You have the great talent of being able to pain a picture out of poerty, its simply beautiful.

    much love
    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      I've always loved the originality of your pieces. They are so different, it's refreshing to read your unorthodox structure that just works so well with what you are writing. This was very cute, it sounded so peaceful, heavenly. This is definitely a favorite. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good piece. i love all of your work though so i didnt really expect it to be otherwise. i love it. keep it uip.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is indeed a bright and uplifting poem to start my day with. It reads so smoothly and peaceful. You did great with this one. Angels playing, the sky crooning..
    Yeah.. if I had wings (and maybe we all do in a way) I'd unfurl them and stay a while.. up the street, by the pond, where angels play.

    Nice!
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is beautiful
    You captured that beautiful fereling one gets when they have a personal relationship with God and worded it brilliantly in write
    This is probably the best poem Ive read of yours
    Very Beautiful!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      nice pic you posted thanx for the characters and the pics in comments its to bad they took abbot and costello off tv
    i like your post something i dont think of much **angels ** i think i will stay playing in the devils fire seems to me is where i spent most of my life
    anywaz great poem and hope all is well

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I love this, it was like a dream of some sort. The imagery and flow was just so great. I love the way you made heaven and the angels seem so attainable. I loved this so much. It had a child like feel to this, full of wonder and beauty. Great job Tiff!

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Very refreshing Tiffaroo and it implanted may images in my mind. Your rhyme was spot on as well.

    A lovely poem that stays in the mind.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      so pretty.. playing with the angels sounds fun. i wrote once about playing frisbee with my angel and her halo..!

    this so playful and has a calming effect on me. i love that they gather at the pond and then go flying.
    i'll think i'll find 'em!

    peace&love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm cute and imaginative poem! Has to have a little touch up but other then that u have an original poem keep up the imagination we need it now & days peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Etheral, mystical...

    I really did picture angels soaring while reading this.
    Funny how you use such simple words, yet you paint a bigger picture through them.
    I want to play with the angels.
    :(

    This was a wonderful piece.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]


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