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    dots Submission Name: Last Will and Testamentdots
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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsLast Will and Testamentdots
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    The tears I've cried belong to you
    My secret smiles, my laughter, my every song
    For you, my love, the light in my eyes shone
    Now we're gone forever, and forever seems so long
    So long to be abandoned of all my conforts, all your love
    Whatever eternity ensues, I want the security of knowing I'm with you
    This world cannot determine the final denoument
    But where all eterity is spent is decided by God above
    And in my heart, I fear nothing more than being apart from you
    Who's to say we will not die alone and part again?
    For my worthless life
    Here's my final will and testament
    The blissful nights I spent with you
    My secret kiss, my dreams, my every thought
    For you, my love, my soul survived
    Now we're gone forever and forever seems so long

    Just one day without your voice
    And I'm already missing you
    Life is incomplete, when I'm alone
    Where are you? I wish I knew
    Will you let me read your mind?
    Can I know your deepest secrets?
    I want to know you perfectly
    I'm curious about you, I'll admit
    Love is life, life is immortal
    My love for you will never die
    Youre my sunshine in the darkness
    You hold me close, wont let me cry
    Sof or my life
    Heres my last will and testament
    The tears ive cried belong to you
    My secret smiles, my laughter, my every song
    For you, my love, the light in my eyes shone
    Now you're gone, and forever is too long.




    Submitted on 2006-03-16 14:15:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awwww...now how can a person not like a write that has "my love" intertwined into it in all the right places? This was spectacular. A few spelling errors here and there...but oar well.

    It carries itself in a couple of ways, something written to a person taken away by death, or something written to a person taken away from worldly circumstances. Whichever way you meant it, it was somberly sweet.
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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