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    dots Submission Name: Gray Mazedots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGray Mazedots

    The look on your face puzzles me.
    I sometimes wish that I could jump into your brain
    and walk around in that gray maze
    not caring if I ever find my way out.

    Submitted on 2004-05-04 11:34:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your work isn't banal, it's just original. would never have thought about something like that. great image.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      The subject matter may be brainy, but compared to your other work I found this to be banal.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      Another Excellent short but sweet--no further words needed write!
    Your work is a challenge to comment to and think of something besides compliments--as well as give a longer comment..lol Silver
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this sometimes i wish i can do this especially w/ my b/f b/c sometiems he lieks to close up and not tell me what hes feelign and i make him do it anyways i would jsut loveto travel around his mind and never find my way out b/c hes such a complex person that he amazes me sometimes, but anywho, let me quit going on about him lol, great write!
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...well now, this is an interesting concept, and i think one step into the mind of this likkle itty bitty brain of mine, might just be a bit to flashy and twirly and strange for you to comprehend...and if you reached my "Wolfy image" section, well you'd wanna leave. RIGHT now. ::shudders:: man, dredge up old memories on me...sheesh. Then again, it brings up good ones too...damn girl, you make me think to much!!! ::twitches:: novertheless, excellent write.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      the idea of brains being a gray maze is a little gross, but i guess your talking more about thoughts, not the actual organ. sometimes people do confusing things and sometimes people are just confused, and this poem conveys it.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by all the english boys | [ Reply to This ]

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