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    dots Submission Name: Mind Gamesdots
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    Author: LostInYerTears
    ASL Info:    14/F/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 85/86/32
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 673
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 665



    Description:
       ever had that one guy/girl that played hard to get or was so confusing it drived you madd?
    well this poem i made when i was with my ex last year.anyway tell me what you think...


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    dotsMind Gamesdots
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    I Hate You
    I Love You
    which one
    can decide
    confused?
    so am i

    i want to live
    i want to die
    i want to part
    i want to cry

    i move to slow
    i move to fast
    make up yer mind
    forget the past

    im too mature
    im too immature
    wich one
    hurry decide
    cant choose?
    tis be fine

    you cant make up yer mind
    neither can i
    our relationship may not survive

    if you love me you'll understand
    i need you to make up yer mind
    if you cant
    this may be our last good-bye




    Submitted on 2006-03-16 15:03:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this poem was pretty good because the flow was very steady...also the contrast between lines made it more interesting to right (ie: i hate you, i love you). although many poems that are about guy/girl relationships make me groan because of all the drama that tends to go along with that sort, this one didn't because it wasn't exaggerated and "the world is gonna end because i'm in a bad relationshipish".
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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