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    dots Submission Name: Boundlessdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Inspired by this quote from Kalil Gibran's "The Prophet" Chapter 34..."For that which is boundless in you abides in the mansion of the sky, whose door is the morning mist, and whose windows are the songs & the silences of night."


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    dotsBoundlessdots
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    As the thought
    of Love
    escaped me;
    Carried by same
    draft of
    eternal free
    Fly Red Hawk
    to catch
    sail's glide...
    Mind float cloud
    to drift
    divine ride




    Submitted on 2004-05-04 12:47:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      has anyone ever told you that philosophy is just a way of making simple things complicated? However it is hioppocritical, because that's a philosphy in itself. I think this could have been better. it seemed that this time around you constricted your elaboration and feasable structuralization to make it conformative to predisposed expectations of your conjure. not bad though, not bad.
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the feel of this....I often think of thoughts being given to the ethers to be sent by wafting breezes to land where they might do the most good.....Lovely and very Native American in its descriptors.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Ellipsis, I meant. Blah, I hate that you can't edit comments. I'll keep typing to assure proper length.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really pretty. Do you think the ellipis is abosolutely essential? I think they're far overused, and I'm not sure you need it here.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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