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    dots Submission Name: Through your Windowdots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 840
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    Description:
       hey this is a poem that i wrote in high school some time ago. i guess it means what ever you make it. use your imagination*
    i hope that it was okay, pretty short.


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    dotsThrough your Windowdots
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    night falls
    sun is gone
    through your window
    silence so long
    nervous thoughts
    sparkling tears*
    openned arms
    running from fears
    night is gone
    sun is clear
    taste his love
    from here to there....




    Submitted on 2006-03-16 23:34:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like how its open for interpretation. The poem has very good concept. Full of feeling. My suggestion if you want to improve this would be to not worry about the rhyming and to add some visually appealing metaphors.
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by lanarei | [ Reply to This ]
      Looking through a window reveals many many things. I thought this was very well executed. Short, crisp, to the point, and very good.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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