really nice. I like the way u've used the first line of each stanza. I really like the way you've described the setting, it looks so real! It seems like the work of an accomplished author. I'd say this is a total contrast to the hole in the sock poem! haha cheers mihir
it ws akind of poem/story i love it .. i really enjoy reading this... my favorite stanza was :
"She sits and watches him draw He looks up and catches her eye. The wind carries his hair into his face As the world bids the day goodbye."
but i think the first line in every stanza doesnt help much ..it just interrupts the flow here wel keep writing and take care have a nice day and if you have a chance please take a look to my writings... peace and love! Victor