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    dots Submission Name: Warped & Twisteddots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWarped & Twisteddots
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    Harsh words & violent blows
    Hidden secrets nobody knows
    Eyes are open, hands are fisted
    Deep inside I'm warped & twisted
    So many tricks & so many lies
    Too many whens & too many whys
    Nobody's special, nobody's gifted
    I'm just me, warped & twisted
    Sleeping awake & choking on a dream
    Listening loudly to a silent scream
    Call my mind, the number's unlisted
    Lost in someone so warped & twisted
    On my knees, alive but dead
    Look at the invisible blood I've bled
    I'm not gone, my mind has drifted
    Don't expect much, I'm warped & twisted
    Burnt out, wasted, empty, & hollow
    Today's just yesterday's tomorrow
    The sun died out, the ashes sifted
    I'm still here, warped & twisted




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 08:27:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this flows really really well and i loved how you kept putting in 'warped and twisted.' you have a strong gift and i love your poetry.

    love.jen
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really really the enjoyed reading this one i hope that you can hear the excitment in my writing about this one once again u manged make me feel the feeling and emotion behind your writing, witch may not be so accrute on my part due to the fact that i can...not sure of the word iam looking for..anyway great write once again. -jess-
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i've seen this somewhere before, I swear its familiar as hell..mmmmm...i'm not sure where though..anyhows i loved this poem, it was great..the flow was nice..the beginning was my fav. part..the wording and imagery were nothing less than perfect...but i can't help but to remember reading this somewhere else..it rings a bell, but i'm not sure where to..anyhows keep up the great work, love ya!..laters
    -Lucy-
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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