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    dots Submission Name: Something must be wrongdots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSomething must be wrongdots
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    Something must be wrong with me
    with all this hurt inside,
    always bursting with anger,
    and never any pride.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if all I do is cry,
    I can't stop this pain
    all I want to do is die.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if my emotions run wild,
    all this confusion does
    is make me feel like a lost child.

    Something must be wrong with me
    with all these terrible things,
    always there and never gone
    depression is what it brings.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if I can't stop these thoughts,
    all this pain does
    is turn my stomach in knots.

    Something is truly wrong with me
    when I think there's only one way out,
    "Let this pain end,"
    is all my heart will shout.




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 08:31:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      once again i swear i've seen this..no joke..hhmmmm..well the poem was awsome..i could relate dearly..

    "Something must be wrong with me
    with all this hurt inside,
    always bursting with anger,
    and never any pride.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if all I do is cry,
    I can't stop this pain
    all I want to do is die."

    Those two stanzas were my fav...i guess because i could relate, to the second stanza most thought..depression sucks..but its nice at times i guess..anyhows this piece was lovely..keep up the great work!
    -Lucy-
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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