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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 134
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 503



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    dotsTimedots
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    This time we've had
    Didn't last long enough,
    Passing way to quickly,
    It left a lot to thought.

    This time we were given,
    Hours, days, and years,
    Left and went to fast,
    It left lots of tears.

    So much went unsaid
    So much went untold
    Promises were broken
    Promises were sold.

    Now we're leaving
    Everyone's gone,
    It's a new beginning,
    It's a new dawn.




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 09:01:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a good piece. see, it shows that you really regret for

    "So much went unsaid
    So much went untold
    Promises were broken
    Promises were sold."

    but also shows that you've found a way to make it a past, to get over it.
    it really is a killer when sth that you can't change happens, passes and there's nothing you can do about it.
    i like the optimism in the last two lines. the whole thing is not strong enough, by my taste (and that's only me) but all in all, a good one.

    J
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. Sad though. Something you havent told me? Anyways, I like this piece because ive been through all of that and this again. Seeing the end of things is hard especially if wounds were never healed, if things were left to be solved. If you made this longer this piece coul be great. even so I liked it. Keep writing hun.

    Kairo
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]



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