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    dots Submission Name: Puppet - Prologuedots
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    Author: Viol3t
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3/0/3
    Words: 656
    Class/Type: Story/Dark
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       This is a Prologue to the story I will soon be writing. Feel free to make any kind of comments, I don't care what you have to say, negative or positve, just tell me thr truth. <3


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    dotsPuppet - Prologuedots
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    Puppet
    Chapter 00 Prologue: Arisu's Last Turn

    "Mommy. ...Daddy"
    "I miss you."

    The faint blue light above her face wasn't as bright anymore. Her sight was now blurred and dull. The screaming in the room to her right began to start up again. A boy in the room left to her began to shout in frustration and fear. He too, recognized the girl's screams, and was despairing and angry that he could not do anything to help his friend as she continued to scream in pain. Arisu felt her tears trickle down the sides of her face again. She was to weak to scream anymore. A few minuets ago, she herself had just gotten through with the morning's torment. Or was it night? afternoon? She didn't know. She had long ago lost track of the time.

    What seemed like an hour later, Arisu began to hear more sounds from the room to her right. It was the sounds of machinery and heavy objects pounding, ripping, and of course, causing extreme pain to their friend. Arisu knew it was her end. Her other two friends had died hours after the same sound came from their rooms. The experiment would go wrong and their friend would die as well. The boy in the room to her left decided not to scream anymore, but cry. She had never heard him cry before. Arisu couldn't help it, she began to cry aloud as well. From the lack of water for the past few months, her tears stung her eyes badly, but she could not rub them. She cried more. She was still strapped down to the gurney and couldn't possibly move. Arisu didn't know when, but later, her friend to her right stopped weeping. She wasn't sure if she passed out, was crying silently, didn't have anymore energy, or worse dead. Her fears were confirmed when the sound of a thousand lights came on in the room to her left. She saw the dirty orange and yellow glow come from beneath her friend's room. The light turned electric blue and the buzzing of machinery began to make it's self noticed. Arisu couldn't recognize what her friend saying, it was in English, but he was no doubtly yelling cruel words to their tormenter. Then silence. Her friend began to weep again, and it was breaking Arisu's heart. She knew that after his turn, it would be hers. He was scheduled for the final experiment. And then she would undergo her final experiment. She would die last, and alone. She began again, to cry, but it was much more loud then her other cries. She then began to scream.

    "Arisu, séjour fort! Faites cela pour moi! Restez fort!"
    She couldn't believe it, she knew Vincent was terribly weak now, but even so, he manage to scream his last words of hope and comfort to her"
    And then, she found her own strength
    "Ah, Vincent. J'ai peur. Je ne pense pas que je puis. Veuillez ne pas me laisser!"
    She knew that he wouldn't be able to help that, but she didn't want to loose him like all her other friends.
    "Princesse, je ne vous laisserais jamais "
    Even through all that was happening, he could still pick fun at her. She scowled, then sadly smiled.
    "Je sais que vous pas , je t'aime"
    "Je t'aime aussi"
    laughter could be heard. She swelled so much from anger, she knew the voice of their tormentor very well by now. It always haunter her, and was all she could hear besides the screams of her friends.
    "Séjour fort, princesse"
    "Je"
    She tightly shut her eyes and began to weep silently as she listened to Vincent's screams of agony.

    "Mommy.....Daddy, it'll be my turn to play this game soon. I'm sorry, if I never return home again."




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      Hmmm... I good one, I like it. Bavo, mon petit, I can't wait to read the first chapter. But by the by, I would check some of your spelling in the beginning and you need a few grammar changes in there as well. The flow is decent and creative. Good work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by LongPastDead | [ Reply to This ]



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