Description: This one, for me, is hard to translate to this format because I wrote this while listening to David Gilmour's new album, "On An Island" and the piece I drew out and word stacked & the whole piece made a wonderful picture, literally, with words
If you haven't checked out the album I highly suggest "IT" - very melodic and magical & great for inspiration
Happy St. Patrick's Day ES & Happy Friday!
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Sing To Me ~ Guitar Man -------------------------------------------
Sing to me
every colored hue ~*~
Reveal to me
in a chord of
the music floats
tis quite a ride
Do you care 2 Dance?
I n'er heard this song before
nor had this circumstance
Though "IT" All "IZ" orchestrated
"IT" All "IZ" present in
I can really see how "On An Island" really contributes to this poem. From what I have heard from the album, it is the usual David Gilmour/Pink Floyd dreaminess. The album, I find, seems mediocre at best. Now, anyways, this comment is supposed to be on your poem.
FOCUS!I NEED FOCUS!
Ok, that's better.
I like it when colours are mentioned in songs and poetry. Dreamy blue: quiet, calm and soothing. I can just see you and this "guitar man" on a boat (or raft) on the sea, rising and falling on the waves that carry you along the rocky cliff coast. He sits there strumming his guitar and singing, while you sit and listen, in a dreamy state of semi-sleepiness. Wow...I'm getting tired!
YOUR POEM HAS POWERS! POWERS I SAY!
I see you like to "illustrate" with letters. Sometimes it is ok, but I have noticed you do it a lot. And when I mean a lot, I mean a lot. And when I mean that I mean a lot...you get the point ~*~ <----dreamy!
Do you care 2 dance? I can see him turning his guitar onto auto-pilot and then he gets up and waltzes with you on the boat (or raft) that rises and falls on the waves. I see music in your ears and love in your eyes and kisses on your lips. I think you really and truly love the guitar man and his music! Congrats!
I wish I could have a guitar girl for myself. or a tambourine girl so that I could sing "Hey, Mrs. Tambourine girl, play a song for me..."
The guitar man starts to play a song you have never heard before. It is new and exciting and you don't know what to do right away. I love random and new!
Space and time are excellent words and I love to have them in my poems. Keep using these words. They make me feel happy and light inside!
I really liked this poem! Keep up the good poetry and please, a little less of the letter illustrations.
The Title brought me to this poem and I'm quite impressed. There's nothing more romantic than a man with a guitar singing and making melody with his lady love. A soft melody tune as she sways to the beat... Enjoyed, ~Linda
I rather liked this a lot. It really had a feel good feeling to it i think. Music is a awesome thing. I dont know how I could live without it. I like the lyrics a lot. My sister plays guitar, and shes getting quite good. Awesome job! inkpen
Thge guitar really can create quite an atmosphere The beautiful sounds coming out of her chords can be so relaxing to one who needs this rhythem to relax I really liked the way you worded this I am also a big fan of the gutar Have you ever heard of Yngwie Malsteem I saw him in concert like 15 years ago the guy is amazing God Bless Ron
hi thanx for the comment on images my spirits that i hold with me are hard but also very simple i can make any post go to the darkest extreme of life and then turn it into my childs smile i dont no where it came from as i did not write a note till age 41 from then on it just came natural as a friend of mine gave me the name just before he died as i was talking to him
i liked yor post i alwaz seem to read into what the persons character is like by their poems and in meeting people that also came on that day he died
How cute. This was like a folk song you sang at a camp fire. I liked the rhyming in this and the carefree feel of this. I can imagine a guy playing his guitar to me. You did a fine job with this and lifted my spirits toady. Yeah, music will help us forget we are need flood stage now. lol.
I like this ode to a guitar man as the short, focused piece it is. It captures the romance of a musician who can make us feel certain emotions. However, I couldn't help but feel jaded reading it, knowing how f*&k up so many musicians are-they can make you feel, in real life relationships, frustrated, crazy (bad crazy, not good crazy) and TOO emotionally saturated. They, like this poem indicates to me, are only good in small, relatively distant doses. Makes me wanna write the evil twin poem to this. Ha ha... Cleo