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    dots Submission Name: Sing To Me ~ Guitar Mandots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This one, for me, is hard to translate to this format because I wrote this while listening to David Gilmour's new album, "On An Island" and the piece I drew out and word stacked & the whole piece made a wonderful picture, literally, with words

    If you haven't checked out the album I highly suggest "IT" - very melodic and magical & great for inspiration

    Happy St. Patrick's Day ES & Happy Friday!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif


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    dotsSing To Me ~ Guitar Mandots
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    Sing to me
    Guitar Man
    tonal language
    every colored hue ~*~

    Reveal to me
    true nature
    in a chord of
    dreamy blue

    Express to
    "i" All
    love eventide
    the music floats
    tis quite a ride

    Do you care 2 Dance?

    I n'er heard this song before
    nor had this circumstance

    Though "IT" All "IZ" orchestrated
    no space
    no time
    "IT" All "IZ" present in
    this lovely
    rhyme ~*~




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 13:33:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Having quite an affinity for Mr. Gilmour I could readily relate to the gauzy feel of this piece. Don't let any possible negative reviews dampen your spirit or dull your sharp senses.
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm pretty sure there's a typo in the first stanza. It wasn't bad, but it kinda seems somewhat scattered.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really see how "On An Island" really contributes to this poem. From what I have heard from the album, it is the usual David Gilmour/Pink Floyd dreaminess. The album, I find, seems mediocre at best. Now, anyways, this comment is supposed to be on your poem.

    FOCUS!I NEED FOCUS!

    Ok, that's better.

    I like it when colours are mentioned in songs and poetry. Dreamy blue: quiet, calm and soothing. I can just see you and this "guitar man" on a boat (or raft) on the sea, rising and falling on the waves that carry you along the rocky cliff coast. He sits there strumming his guitar and singing, while you sit and listen, in a dreamy state of semi-sleepiness. Wow...I'm getting tired!

    YOUR POEM HAS POWERS! POWERS I SAY!

    I see you like to "illustrate" with letters. Sometimes it is ok, but I have noticed you do it a lot. And when I mean a lot, I mean a lot. And when I mean that I mean a lot...you get the point ~*~ <----dreamy!

    Do you care 2 dance? I can see him turning his guitar onto auto-pilot and then he gets up and waltzes with you on the boat (or raft) that rises and falls on the waves. I see music in your ears and love in your eyes and kisses on your lips. I think you really and truly love the guitar man and his music! Congrats!

    I wish I could have a guitar girl for myself. or a tambourine girl so that I could sing
    "Hey, Mrs. Tambourine girl, play a song for me..."

    The guitar man starts to play a song you have never heard before. It is new and exciting and you don't know what to do right away. I love random and new!

    Space and time are excellent words and I love to have them in my poems. Keep using these words. They make me feel happy and light inside!

    I really liked this poem! Keep up the good poetry and please, a little less of the letter illustrations.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      The Title brought me to this poem and I'm quite impressed.
    There's nothing more romantic than a man with a guitar singing and making melody with his lady love.
    A soft melody tune as she sways to the beat...
    Enjoyed,
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this piece. it is something different...and something new. before reading this i had never seen anything written in this way. so keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      alrighty im confused shtless

    dont worry about explaing it to me
    so i shant comment
    exept it sounded cool

    please read and comment on my stuff
    tracy
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      I rather liked this a lot. It really had a feel good feeling to it i think. Music is a awesome thing. I dont know how I could live without it. I like the lyrics a lot. My sister plays guitar, and shes getting quite good. Awesome job!
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      Thge guitar really can create quite an atmosphere
    The beautiful sounds coming out of her chords can be so relaxing to one who needs this rhythem to relax
    I really liked the way you worded this
    I am also a big fan of the gutar
    Have you ever heard of Yngwie Malsteem
    I saw him in concert like 15 years ago the guy is amazing
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing what a man / woman and a guitar can do.

    Inspiration is a wonderful thing.

    "He who can inspire, can do anything".

    Frank Maguire 17/3/06.
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for the comment on images
    my spirits that i hold with me are hard but also very simple i can make any post go to the darkest extreme of life and then turn it into my childs smile
    i dont no where it came from as i did not write a note till age 41
    from then on it just came natural as a friend of mine gave me the name just before he died as i was talking to him

    i liked yor post i alwaz seem to read into what the persons character is like by their poems and in meeting people that also came on that day he died

    keep writing as i enjoy the reading too

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      How cute. This was like a folk song you sang at a camp fire. I liked the rhyming in this and the carefree feel of this. I can imagine a guy playing his guitar to me. You did a fine job with this and lifted my spirits toady. Yeah, music will help us forget we are need flood stage now. lol.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this ode to a guitar man as the short, focused piece it is. It captures the romance of a musician who can make us feel certain emotions.
    However, I couldn't help but feel jaded reading it, knowing how f*&k up so many musicians are-they can make you feel, in real life relationships, frustrated, crazy (bad crazy, not good crazy) and TOO emotionally saturated. They, like this poem indicates to me, are only good in small, relatively distant doses. Makes me wanna write the evil twin poem to this. Ha ha...
    Cleo
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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