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The Parallel Question


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I know the ideas don't always quite flow...


The Parallel Question



Three stars in a line outside in the darkest sky there is
I wonder what they are and if they still exist?

Ever think a shooting star was an angel being born?
Why are things so quiet after a fierce lightning storm?

If you could jump forever would you land in eternity?
If that jump was to escape would you ever be free?

Why is it so impossible to parallel lines to cross?
Well I think they'e wrong and that means everyone is lost

There are lines everywhere in everything we see
Just like the lines in the oxygen you can see and breathe

Like the lines in a newspaper that lie straight as they are
There' a perfect line between you and a twinkling star




Submitted on 2006-03-17 17:52:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I could answer all of those questions intellectually, but I won't, because those kind of answers are stupid. The truth is, shooting stars aren't Angels being born. Shooting stars are Angels racing their Angelic Skylines, Murcielagos, Ferraris, Lotuses, and other such Heavenly cars across the skies.
If you could jump forever, you'd be in the Olympics. Duh.
Parallel lines do cross! I have seen it! Like the double helix. If you look at it from the side, it crosses! Yet, it goes along itself forever and ever, never touching, but still crosses! I hope I'm right, there...
Lines are used in Anime... Lines are awesome...

Things to fix... Yes. We have finally reached this point where I tell you what you did below par.
First line. End of it. Doesn't work well with line 2's end. 'Is' and 'Ist' is a kinda weird sound combining thingy. I don't know the word for it, nor can I help you by fixing the word. I suck at that. I just notice things.
Uh... That is all for now. One day, If I grow wings like an Angel, I'll take you to the sky so you can find the answers to these questions yourself. but the part about the Angels, cars, and racing are all true.
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Sephiroth | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed the paradoxical questions posed in this poem. The idea of jumping forever made me think of jumping in space and continually falling downward; that is like jumping into eternity and yes the question remains, you're jumping away from something, but are you ever truly free if you stay in the motion of jumping? This poem struck me as very mathematical and you conceived the notion of ignoring the laws of math and physics.

This poem can be very vague at points, thus leaving it open to a broad range of interpretation, but are you trying to say that there can exist "lines" in air and parallel lines can cross as well, that shooting stars can be angels, and basically that anything can be anything you make of it? If you want to call it a line, its a line kind of deal?

The 2nd stanza seemed incongruous with the rest of the poem but I think you could find a way to fit all the stanzas in so the reader can see the clear correlation between them. I think it would make more people read the poem instead of thinking, ok, is this poem unclear or am I just not reading enough into it?

Nonetheless, I enjoyed it.

Peace,
Astarael
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ]


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