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rain and pain


Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79 /119 /44
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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this is writen for me and me alone it you like it great if you dont i dont really care i had to get these feelings out before they consumed me


rain and pain



can you feel the pain in my soul by looking through my eyes

you see my expresstion of pain i have found no words to exress carved deep and long in to my arms

but you tell me to be ok when someones voice that i do not know ecohs in my head
repeting the word that cut deepest into the soul

"...and every time it rains i feel her holding me, and every time it rains are the angels crying."

for i have cryed for my love and my lonliness
i have cried for the woman only i know and i fear this and what i am feeling

and wispered strangth which that some one gives me rescues me and i stand eye to eye with death

"when the clouds take the sky does a soul give you life"




Submitted on 2006-03-17 20:16:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was a good poem filled with emotion although you might wanna go through and check your spelling as i saw a few missed spelled words. Jo
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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