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    dots Submission Name: rain and paindots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       this is writen for me and me alone it you like it great if you dont i dont really care i had to get these feelings out before they consumed me


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    can you feel the pain in my soul by looking through my eyes

    you see my expresstion of pain i have found no words to exress carved deep and long in to my arms

    but you tell me to be ok when someones voice that i do not know ecohs in my head
    repeting the word that cut deepest into the soul

    "...and every time it rains i feel her holding me, and every time it rains are the angels crying."

    for i have cryed for my love and my lonliness
    i have cried for the woman only i know and i fear this and what i am feeling

    and wispered strangth which that some one gives me rescues me and i stand eye to eye with death

    "when the clouds take the sky does a soul give you life"




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 20:16:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a good poem filled with emotion although you might wanna go through and check your spelling as i saw a few missed spelled words. Jo
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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