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    dots Submission Name: Love as seendots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 551
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Love is all that one lives for. Here is what i described.One of my oldies.

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    dotsLove as seendots
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    // defining love
    Love is a disease it seems,
    Spreading all over the world.
    The blight of it is pain and happiness,
    Of which feelings is not just than gold.

    // a woman is for what
    Without a flower to bloom,
    There is no beauty it seems.
    But for all the woman that are born,
    Is the goal of life for it seems.

    //feeling of love
    The sweetness of honey,
    Known only to the one who tastes.
    So is the heart in the poison sting of a bee,
    Stolen the honey of love who makes.

    // journey of life
    The life of an endless journey,
    Is the end when we know.
    But all that start with the life,
    Not ends does it with love for all.

    // lust is must
    Savage is the heart,
    For an infinite lust.
    The pleasure that we search,
    Which we have and is must.

    // cure for love
    But yet we not know,
    The problem of love.
    The cure for the blight,
    Is to love somehow.

    // failures in love
    But not all dreams come true,
    Which are bleak or sometimes blank.
    Of the love that we seek,
    Will be a ship that we sank.

    //the pain in failure
    The pain that is endured,
    In the loss of the gift.
    Is worse than a sword,
    Cut and shift.

    //my experience
    Life so doomed,
    Will it seem till the end.
    Tears roll on thought,
    Life to be dragged till the end.




    Submitted on 2006-03-17 23:12:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's so funny that i've come across this, because i just posted something not that long ago that pretty much says that its people that complicate love, not love that complicates love. And here, as nice as it sounded, just made love seem so complicated to the point that it's not worth having...wrecking our own ships.

    i liked it, though some of the wording made it a bit difficult in places. other than that, i dont have much to say for suggestion
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      That love game is so unpredictable.. so changing at any moment.. so good yet so bad when its gone .. this was good.. the way you set it up .. flow was good too.. thanks for sharing I liked it

    *peace*
    penny
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]


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