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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Dreamsdots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSweet Dreamsdots

    Sweet dream wishes
    settle onto a sleepy brow.
    Whipsers and kisses
    caress like a silent lullaby.
    Her sleepy eyes
    draw another day to a close.

    Curtains open on an inner play.

    Nite, nite and sweet dreams
    my little angel.

    Submitted on 2006-03-18 13:01:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Most short poems are just lacking a certain amount of description, but this works beautifully. Short and sweet. I really like it. I enjoy the comparison of sleep and a play. Quite good. I hope to read more of yours.

    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by Deep_Monty | [ Reply to This ]
      aww so sweet. how beautiful your words are. a saying that could be passed from mother to child for many generations to come. your night time saying could never seem dull even when repeated every night. as reading this piece i felt the warmth and deep love you had. thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this
    To me this was the words of a Mother speaking pure Love to the daughter she Loves more then anything in the world
    This is really beautiful
    Great Write
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow a very sweet lullaby i like yoru wors they are very sweet.. well keep writing .. and i cant say amny negative becuase those words came from your heart...
    spo keep writing and if you have a chance please take a lookk to my wriitngs..
    peace and love
    take care
    and have a ncie day
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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