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    dots Submission Name: Shoot Me Downdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 399/443/123
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 235
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1563



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    dotsShoot Me Downdots
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    verse 1:

    i've taken another wrong direction
    i read the map wrong and now i'm lost
    trying to find my way back home again
    this guilty feeling inside won't go away
    and i can't figure out just what to do
    so i take my chances by turning to you

    chorus:

    shoot me down till i'm nothing, nothing
    more than what lies beneath your feet
    i came to you for your reassurance
    but you walked and turned the other cheek
    shoot me down till i'm nothing, nothing
    and i'm worth nothing more than that

    verse 2:

    this stupid constant need of affection
    has led me down the wrong way to fall
    falling on my fat ass, i lost again
    i'm giving into nothing i have broken
    her trust by kissing her man when i did
    can you help me without me being put down


    verse 3:

    i'm falling into this depression
    cause you won't help me when i need it
    feeling like you don't give a shit at all
    i'm losing perfection, losing it all again
    as you keep putting me down and me down
    give me a break, saying i'm nothing kills me

    coda:
    shoot me down till i'm nothing, nothing
    more than what lies beneath your feet
    i came to you but you turned the other cheek
    pull your gun out place it at my temple
    pull the trigger and shoot me down one last time




    Submitted on 2006-03-18 17:37:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like everything but the chorus. It just did not sit right with me. I think your lyrics got more blunt as the song progressed giving a angry feeling unlike the start was a sad feeling. I think you kept a very good flow. And I think that you really wrote a good song here. Overall, this was very good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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