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    dots Submission Name: Giving updots
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    Author: nosferotu_gurl
    ASL Info:    24/female/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 140/165/67
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGiving updots
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    You close your eyes and you try to wish away
    the shaggy blanket that's smothering the life out of your dreariest day.
    You fight and fight until you have no will to save your own life.
    And the moment everything's slipping away,
    you say a silent prayer, regretting all the rights you've wronged.
    You know it won't be long before it doesn't matter anymore.
    You cry and cry and you just can't ignore the pain that boils inside your mind, heart, and soul.
    You feel the tears swelling up in your mind,
    and the pressure is gathering up behind your eyes.
    All you can do is let out a silent sigh,
    to throw in the towel of the last day of your life.




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      are you talking about suicide? hmm... there are two types of suicidal people... those who whine and moan about it, and those who are dead. which are you? and don't give me any "you're so insensitive" b.s. why? cause i was one of those pansies who was so convinced that life was not worth living... until i figured out that neither killing myself or whining about it would solve [censored]. all i had to do was stand up, and say, "F U! this is no longer acceptable terms for my life. Piss off parents, up yours teachers, and to hell with you cops! i will live my life on my terms and i simply don't care what you think about that" and it's not enough to say it, you must believe it
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]


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