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    dots Submission Name: Smothered in these Pagesdots
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    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSmothered in these Pagesdots
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    These pages soaked and wrinkled,
    cause them to start tearing.
    Spotted pages from these tears,
    because you cant start caring.
    I don't expect you to,
    so continue to rip my heart.
    Love never means a thing
    until its torn apart.
    Our love means EVERYTHING.
    I'm not sure how I survived.
    Now in every blood stained page
    this ink will bury us alive.
    Smothered by this story.
    Every word takes away my breath.
    I promise I won't stop writing,
    until there's nothing left.
    But just as all these love tales go,
    ours will end in death.




    Submitted on 2006-03-18 19:35:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked the flow and rythm in this poem. I also loved the imagery and concept. Love is deadly. I hope to hear more from you.

    ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      That's true. Every great love story does indeed end in death.
    It reminds me of the song, "Join Me In Death." If you've never heard it, you really should. I'm sensitive, therefore, it makes me cry.

    But anyways, that is lovely. You're so creative, Samm. I love the way you never stray from your original point (like I do. Theres no stopping me!).

    My favorite part is:

    "Love never means a thing
    until its torn apart.
    Our love means EVERYTHING."

    I get it and I like it.
    The truth about it is what disgusts me though.
    Love...
    It's so overrated.
    I mean, sure it seems nice at the time, but thats only until the other person rips your heart out and shoves it down your throat, leaving you bitter and angry for the rest of your meaningless, pathetic life.
    lol Sorry for that crazy rambling rampage.
    I'm like a time bomb!
    ...tick...tick...tick...BOOM!
    see? like that.

    hah Anyways...

    My other favorite line is, "Smothered by this story." Just cause it fits so darn perfectly.

    Ooo you have such a way with words.
    I'm proud

    As always Samm,
    Very beautifully done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo samm, that was so pretty!

    my favorite part was:
    "Love never means a thing
    until its torn apart."
    because it's true, you always write the truth. well unless your lieing... but that's a different story.
    i got the point, yay! (sometimes i don't, cause i'm slow)

    Lovely metaphors dear, you're awesome.

    keep on keepin' on!
    -Kate (the saturday potty-mouth)
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great i like the emotion to it if only i would have held on to my love he would still be with me today but he's gone b/c of jelous people. Jo
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my god! That poems speaks vollumes. Its breathtakeing. I loved the lines "I don't expect you to,so continue to rip my heart. Love never means a thing until its torn apart." Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
    Amanda
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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