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    dots Submission Name: big mandots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 516
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 494



    Description:
       every weekend our village lads and a nabouring towns guys, end up in a clash, it looks like a war zone, every time there is blood shed, but there is one lad i just cant take my eyes off and he aint one of us, and i dont know the reason why i like him, ive never even spoken to him b4, its crazy.


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    i see you every weekend,
    but you dont see me,
    i cant say hi,
    as there is something between.
    frustrating as it is,
    iv got to keep my feelings tied,
    for if i dont,
    to my mates i may be denied.
    you come to our village,
    you and your boys,
    show up with guns and knives,
    like they are toys.
    they call you the big man,
    you brag you have guts,
    yet ive got this fasination,
    i must be nuts.




    Submitted on 2006-03-19 13:20:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one i really do. you kno that this poem reminds me of a song by prince NO IM NOT OLD
    but it does idk ne ways nice write i like great ending loved it
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by Darcey D | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. I ...actually love it. Its like this mysterious guy, whos kind of...a bad boy and you see him but he doesnt see you. So its like watching from afar. I think this is awesomely written. The end was brilliant. Great job!
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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