Description: whatever anyone wants to write will make me happy.
Time by Sunrise and Moonset -------------------------------------------
Crashing suns and soaring moons,
Fiery trails across the sky,
Creamy glow and Milky residue.
Phoenix tail and Griffon’s breath
Murky pearlescent sheen against
Glittering beacons of hope
Warriors in the night, having conquered
The flames of day
The weakened soldier of morning
Is swallowed whole by the
Obsidian blade of pitch
Triumphantly waving its banner of starlight
Twinkling beams of victory
On the battlefield of broken rays
Slain suns lie in rest
Glory sleeping, and valor spilling its
Inky liquid over the sky.
Until the dawn.
When the light will rise again.
It was so...fantasy. I loved it. Images trailed through my head throughout this one. Lovely write. Phoenix tail and Griffon’s breath-This part especially had some interesting pictures in my head. The non-flow of the poem didn't really work, but it was there enough to make sense. Lovely peice with good images and planning. Great job. Wishing for more ~Brian
The thought of everyday being a battle for the right to reign over the moment is a beautiful idea. You expressed it impressingly well. A writer without a doubt, you are. I will look forward to more works of yours.
wow. That was the first word I thought when I finished this poem. I love the imagery that comes with this. Too many people are afraid of being long-winded and using good descriptions. You captured the image magnificently. I especially liked the lines:
The weakened soldier of morning Is swallowed whole by the Obsidian blade of pitch Triumphantly waving its banner of starlight Twinkling beams of victory On the battlefield of broken rays
Simply wonderful. This was a great refreshment from the empty words I read too often. This one is going in the favorites!
this piece reminds me of something out of harry potter... something mystical and fun... You use very description words, they are sometimes hard to follow througout your piece but they also worked for the over all topic of it i felt at least. I hope to read more pieces from you soon! Im also new to eliteskills but thought i would say welcome. have a wonderful day! Amber