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    dots Submission Name: Hold medots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1212
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       Ever felt the love of just holding someone. Here is an experience.

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    dotsHold medots

    Life in whirls of the dunes of time,
    Cry do we once for to thy it happens.
    Makes the sky cry as rain,
    Hold me forever do we hope in vain.

    Do we cry to hold to be held in sight?
    Oh the pain in happiness, just hold me tonight.
    Warm do we feel in winter, in snow,
    Mother of all, my god in sight.

    Stand as such as an island in the sea,
    Wait for a moment of happiness to be,
    Cry will I embrace death as life,
    My Maya in dreams in reality to be.

    [This is a link of hove I feel for Maya download--http://www.animewallpapers.com/wallpapers/3x3/full_1_1024.asp]

    Ant in a way was I in a war,
    Fight till death is the boon of a curse.
    Live for a life for never have I lived,
    The girl of my dreams, an epic in a verse.

    [This is a link of the girl of my dreams ‘cute beautiful sweet……’

    Submitted on 2006-03-19 21:52:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was an amazing write. Maya would be proud. However, the lnk in the middle of the poem made me have to go back and get my mind refocused, cause the link took me away from your poem. Maybe put it at the end instead?
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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