Description: Hey there, this is something I made for a school project, playing with pictures... a postcard kinda thing. Any sort of feedback is always welcome by me.
Angel of the Lost Hearts -------------------------------------------
A contrast to her heart is her dark beauty.
A device used for rebirth; with her mercy are her tears.
She looks down because she is above.
And unable to embrace us with her true love;
wings on the back urging to be cut.
In her wild tangled hair, she is lost just like us.
That picture is mesmerizing, haha. I had to cover it to read the poem. Whoever the artist is, I love them.
Anyways, I love your use of italics. It makes me feel like those lines are whispered, a secret no one is supposed to know.
For some reason, i keep going back to the line "she looks down on us because she is above". For me it seems like she isn't physically above us. More that she is on another plane of existance, a seperate reality of sorts? And despite this, she wishes to be among us, because she relates emotionally more to us than her own kind.
Maybe I'm reading to far into the poem? Haha. I sometimes do that. I really did enjoy reading this though.
Very nice, touching poem. I take it to symbolize one of tremendous strength (not physical, but emotional) looking at us... one all of us wants to be. One of pure heart, but who's misunderstood. One who's willing to help, but can sometimes be unable to. One who's willing to sacrifice herself to help others in need. One who's compassion could sometimes overwhelm oneself. A truly unique poem. Good job!
does that mean that her heart is good but her appearance is one of someone who looks morbid or evil? like a contridiction within herself between the outward and inner??
and i had a question about two parts in this...
"A device used for rebirth;"
and
"with her true love" ...i didnt quite understand the point of those two lines..is there any way you could elaborate more on those or make their meaning more clear??
other than that i thought this was an awesome write. ..i think you did a great job on this.
all I can say is is is nice deep I like it it has feeling and I should of bee of a while a go but I just had to stay a bit , i'm glade I did couse I would of missed that. I like the way the entire thing is bold as if to sat pay attention to this on not the best I have ever read but I like it is just leaves you thinking damb
An interesting topic. Quite dark, but beautiful in it's own way. It is rather short for deep analysis, but it's length is perfect for it's theme. I cannot think of any advice to give with this piece. The wording seems fine and the imagery describing an image is good as well.
Submission Name: Angel of the Lost Hearts
