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    dots Submission Name: The Pot of Emotionsdots
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    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 752
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 366



    Description:
       Have you ever had a time where everything comes to one point? After it was over all your past emotions came sweeping over you like a wave. But strangely enough the only emotion that emerged was anger at yourself.


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    dotsThe Pot of Emotionsdots
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    Anger towards yourself
    towards others
    Sadness for yourself
    for others

    Guilt for what you did
    for what you didn't do
    Regret for what you said
    for what you didn't say

    All combine into one soul
    So many ingredients,
    but only creates
    the eternal fires of anger




    Submitted on 2006-03-19 23:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh rick. dont be so angry, so full of vile and adverse emotions towards yourself, towards me. i love you. dont you dare ever regret anything you said or did to me, dont ever take back what you gave me, for in doing so, it all becomes a lie. trust me, anger at yourself is no stranger to me, ive been so angry at myself i sought to destroy the sickening blood which flowed within my veins, but in the end i recognized that I was wrong, so wrong. dont let anger destroy you as it almost did me. perhaps it wont destroy you physically, but emotionally, i KNOW it can.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
      I hear you... but the poem is weak. You posted commentary unspecified, so here goes. In order to make it more powerful (which this poem has great potential for) you need to add punctuation. There are also quite a few "what"s, so if you change those around to be lesser in number, that would enhance it as well. I'm somewhat disappointed in the other members of eliteskills b/c your poem has had five views and I am the first to comment.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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