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    dots Submission Name: Breaking Ground/ reviseddots
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    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 190/178/112
    Words: 325
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 152
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I decided to revise this song. added a bridge & re-arranged the chorus


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    dotsBreaking Ground/ reviseddots
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    So many long forgotten ways
    I used to say I love you
    Because, I usually, I only remember some
    of what I lost, until I found you
    Now, I stay up late
    I sit and smoke in the night
    all alone with my dog by my side
    Wondering about the false starts
    'Cause you could feel when words won't say...


    Chorus:
    I could feel I'm breaking ground
    All the life that passes before me
    See the sudden changes-change the sound
    You don't seem to make the time
    No matter how hard you try

    Oh, so compromised by the system
    And I long for the sunset
    I long and I'm wishing
    I'm sick and longing
    for my Lover!

    Chorus:
    I could feel I'm breaking ground
    All the life that passes before me
    See the sudden changes-change the sound
    You don't seem to make the time
    No matter how hard you try

    Some days they tear
    right through me
    I fully understand you
    why the weak have to go
    For the Sake of the Children
    Please color my world

    Chorus:
    I could feel I'm breaking ground
    All the life that passes before me
    See the sudden changes-change the sound
    You don't seem to make the time
    No matter how hard you try

    bridge:
    yeah, no matter, no matter how hard you try
    you're heart's not in it
    along comes mystery
    no one says anything
    leaving things lingering
    and you know that you deserve something more
    breaking ground
    you need to feel a bit of life a bit of pain
    breaking ground
    less is more, so you'll know in case you don't
    breaking ground
    sigh again that's the way it leaves you empty
    sigh again that's the way it leaves you empty
    sigh again yes that's the way it leaves you empty
    leaves you feeling nothing
    nothing
    nothing
    nothing
    not a thing





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    ||| Comments |||
      God, this really does capture loneliness/longing. It seems strange that you can meet people online and everyone is looking for a connection at the line at the grocery store or wherever, but there's so many lonely people in the world. If there were no disconnection, I suppose, there would be no poetry, or songs, or probably prisoners.

    When you post lyrics, I try to hear the song, probably my downfall. Being a musician, I understand that lyrics have to fit into a rythym, and syllables have to match in lines. I'd like to hear some of your songs sung. They must be very unique. Also, only one verse?

    It's a great verse, I really like it. It made me feel like a ghost sitting on the edge of your bed in the middle of the night watching you smoke your cigarette and scratching your dogs ears.

    Don't know what help I've been, but, if you have any of this recorded, I'd love to hear it sometime. Got ESP yet?

    Later,
    Toby
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by afterglow | [ Reply to This ]


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