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    dots Submission Name: Arrogant medots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsArrogant medots
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    Once again I have tripped over my own arrogance
    Thinking I am more than I am
    Inflating myself
    Inevitable really that I should burst.

    Blind and stumbling though my own hot air
    where is my humility
    where is my gentleness and compassion
    I am a fool

    God grant me wisdom and learning
    soften my hardened heart
    Fill me with your grace.




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 06:49:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi there...i think that was nice and short, i like the use of the word inevitabel. I think u could elaborate a bit more on the feeling itself. Have u read that book called Siddhartha by Herman Hesse? I suggest you should!
    Please read some of my work and tell me what u think
    cheers
    mihir
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by mihir | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, confession of a soul, very good write, tom

    "Once again I have tripped over my own arrogance
    Thinking I am more than I am
    Inflating myself
    Inevitable really that I should burst."
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice.. we do sometimes get puffed up about ourselves, don't we? and it is inevitable that someone will burst our bubble, and rightfully so!
    i love the last strophe, asking for wisdom and grace..

    thanks for this morning's lesson, my friend!

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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