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    dots Submission Name: !Wasted Life!dots
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    Author: fallen_angel384
    ASL Info:    17/Female/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 59/87/22
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 288
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 574



    Description:
       one that i wrote when i was really depressed about somthing had it for a while but havn't been able to get onto this site as my network keeps shutting itself down...
    anyways tell me what you think
    izzi xXx


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    dots!Wasted Life!dots
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    This broken girl before your eyes,
    Sits in her room and silently cries,
    Alone in the dark takes a knife to her skin,
    Sits and watches the blood wash away her sins.

    Crying inside,
    Crying out loud,
    Screaming for help,
    But she’s not making a sound.

    She’s in too deep,
    She’s falling apart,
    Just an empty soul,
    With a broken heart.

    She slides down the wall,
    Slowly places down the knife,
    Her head drops to the floor,
    Just another wasted life…




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 09:00:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can relate to this. I used to be suicidal, and a cutter. I usually dont really like rhyming, but this is good. It evokes emotion and makes me want to cry b/c its like the story of my life also, it "hits close to home". I like it alot
    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that alot...makes me remember all that ive gone through even though its not too pleasant ... my life turns to hell the moment i start to think about it but you reminded me of what i wanted to remember...
    thanks!
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by dianne | [ Reply to This ]
      Poems like this should never be termed cliché or everyone writes the same thing, thats not fair. Everyone who is a cutter experiences it in a different way and I have never known about persons who react exactly the same way.

    You wrote you piece with a uniqueness that is your own and let no one tell you otherwise. Your piece was written quite fine. Keep up the good work and have a most blessed day.

    On the issue of the cutting I hope you are able to pull through your struggles and someday stop. Until then try to be strong.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, most people would say that this is a bit too cliché. I liked it a lot. I think that it was well written, and that structure, flow, and work choice was also very nice. Great job. I am really sorry if this is the way you still are feeling. Hopefully you can pull yourself out of this depressed stage. AWESOME JOB! And I am going to add this to my favorites.
    ~Alyssa~
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]



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