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    dots Submission Name: !Hopeless!dots
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    Author: fallen_angel384
    ASL Info:    17/Female/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 59/87/22
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 187
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    Description:
       another one i wrote when i was trying to get over been hit by my dad wrote this about a month ago and showed my dad it but he dont care...

    anyways tell me what you think...
    izzi xXx


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    dots!Hopeless!dots
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    Little girl,
    Sits and cries,
    In the corner,
    Is where she hides.

    Fears the sound,
    Of the key in the,
    Door As she’s knows,
    She’ll feel the pain once more.

    She has no goals,
    No hopes,
    No dreams,
    All she hears are her mother’s screams.

    Stuck on repeat,
    Plays through her mind,
    She seeks a place,
    She’ll never find.

    He staggers up the stairs,
    Stumbles into her room,
    Takes her in his hand,
    And beats her black and blue.

    No one hears her screams,
    Her cries,
    Always invisible,
    Can’t wait to die.

    She picks up the knife,
    Her skin touches the blade,
    Little does her father know,
    In her deathbed she will lay.




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 09:13:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dark. sad with a hint of freeing oneself. i like the rhyme sceme i did nt notice it was rhyming until i read it over again. the "Stuck on repeat, " line is implying that there is no way out. she cant escape but in then end she wins and frees herself. great write
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]



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