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    dots Submission Name: true lovedots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/53/36
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1275
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    dotstrue lovedots
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    True love makes the pain disappear
    You should have nothing to fear
    For if I must walk every mile
    Just so I could see you smile
    It would make it worth the walk
    I love how it never gets boring when we sit and talk
    The miles are just an obstacle in our way
    But this challenge gets smaller every day
    Because ill find a way to see you
    Because I mean it when I say I love you too
    Hurt you I could not
    For I care for you a lot
    It don't matter the distance your in my heart
    I guess this 200-mile race must start
    To get to see you makes my heart soar
    You've opened up all my locked doors
    I closed up tight and hid my self away
    Until you came holding the key to my heart that day
    For once I had nothing to say
    My love for you is pure and true
    The one I hold closest to my heart is you
    Ill be your superman
    But only if you're my number one fan




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 13:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ...I miss that feeling...this is a very good write,I wouldn't change a thing...keep it up,but if it's JUST a write,why is it so strong?
    Anyflip,keep it up,great work...later.

    -Leo
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by GuardianAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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