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    dots Submission Name: miles awaydots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/53/36
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmiles awaydots
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    The love of my life miles away
    But it just makes me long for that one day
    When the day comes that I get to see her
    It would be the best i'm sure
    For in my dreams it's just you and me
    Together at night is when we get to be
    True love will never end
    That's the message i'm trying to send
    Because with out you im lost in tears
    My world crashing down with all my fears
    You unlocked my heart when I locked up everything
    Then you came and made me feel like a king
    You took all my pain away
    I'll love you past that final day
    My heart is forever yours
    As long as you never close those doors
    True love can't be broken or takes
    For it's forsaken
    My fire burns hot in side my heart
    Never did I need that head start
    You came in holding that flame
    Never again shall I feel the same
    I want you to be with me
    But until then ill just me
    The man of your dreams and you the girl of mine
    I love you so much every thing is going fine
    Never in life have I felt like this
    I can't wait till our first kiss




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      wow I don't get why ur not getting any comments on this one....as I've said before I think you have some amazing talent and you really capture my thoughts so well....I"m not sure if I'm the best to comment on this becuz apart from my love life leaving that part of me damaged anyway I am so confused on such matters anymore...but I Loved this and what you were saying...maybe it's just my negativity but did this not work out? you seemed kinda doughty....or reprocahfull anyway this is an amazing write and a definate fave....whoever u wrote this for is so lucky, you seem like an awesome guy;).
    peace
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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