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    Author: ArtichokeMosher
    ASL Info:    15/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146/201/81
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 160
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1056



    Description:
       This poem is about love and what you'll go through to find the right one.


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    You'll go through pain,
    And you'll go through heartache.
    You'll fall with pouring rain,
    And you'll survive heartbreak.

    If you are strong enough,
    You'll come through.
    To find the love,
    That was meant for you.

    You'll go through highs,
    You'll go through lows.
    You'll have your goodbyes,
    And you'll have the ones that stay close.

    Just remember that lovers come and lovers go,
    We're never even sure who's letting go today.
    But the challenge is that you really dont know,
    The one thats gunna be there to stay.

    Your love now may be lost,
    But in the end it will be found.
    In the end you will pay the cost,
    Of always having someone around.

    So just don't walk away from what you fear.
    Face your fears and take them on.
    For one day you'll have him here,
    And when you turn to him he won't be gone.




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 20:58:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem, and I like everything about this piece. It maes for good reading, and the scheme of it is also very well formed. I have only two minor points i'd like to raise. I don't like this line "You'll fall with pouring rain" that much, as I think you've tried it only to fit your scheme. "it'll torture your brain/but you will survive heartbreak" is a possible alteration I can think of. "Just remember that lovers come and lovers go,
    We're never even sure who's letting go today" - I'm not sure if i'm pleased or annoyed with the lines from November Rain. Although I love Guns N Roses, I don't think the song should bear even slight mention in an original work.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]



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