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    dots Submission Name: Unnecessary Fallingdots
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    Author: Indigo Kid
    ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428/438/115
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       venting basically... wondering if I am crazy or deserve this feeling or not...


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    dotsUnnecessary Fallingdots
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    I hate my life and most of all how
    you left me to bleed and did the
    absolute minimum like I am someone
    you felt obligated to for some
    half assed reason and then turned
    around and made me feel shitty
    for ever needing you in the first place.

    I deserved more and gave you
    all of those precious moments
    that were wrapped for only you
    and now I am falling in a pit that
    is full of snakes and monsters
    and little bits of you mixed into
    the swirl of what used to be the
    way you felt long ago.

    The sudden change of climate has
    made cloudy questions of What, When,
    Where, and most important Why and I
    try to make them go away but they
    have become my life and the knowing
    that I hold no special value while I sit
    here flopping on the deck makes me
    wonder how long I can do this
    without the water that I need...

    But then again, maybe its me and maybe
    the mistakes I've made have made you
    become this entity that haunts me to this
    very second and this whole thing is
    completely unnecessary and I am crazy
    in a Sybil sort of way and you are
    just in your attiitude.




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