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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: Indigo Kid
    ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428/438/115
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 969
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 393



    Description:
       No foprm, I realize, but its just a rant, I guess...


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    dotsTimedots
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    The mirror reflects the girl I was
    and the woman I am and
    the person that you
    once wanted me to
    become.

    Battered and dying as a flower
    by the wind and rain in the fall
    time has now caught up with
    me and made me see that
    all that you wanted me to
    be was never possible
    because you will not let
    it be.




    Submitted on 2006-03-20 22:08:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think this is just a rant as you say...
    It's a simple direct poem. Of the evolution of a person as she grows older and she feels what she has strived to be for someone else is not what she's become...with no fault of her own but at the hands of the person she wanted so hard to impress...
    could it be a parent or a long time lover?
    "Battered and dying as a flower
    by the wind and rain in the fall"
    Perhaps if you put more lines like this your piece...
    you will feel it's worth the rank of poem instead of rant...

    Keep writing,
    Swanne
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]


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