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Author: Indigo Kid
ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428 /438 /115
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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No foprm, I realize, but its just a rant, I guess...


Time



The mirror reflects the girl I was
and the woman I am and
the person that you
once wanted me to
become.

Battered and dying as a flower
by the wind and rain in the fall
time has now caught up with
me and made me see that
all that you wanted me to
be was never possible
because you will not let
it be.




Submitted on 2006-03-20 22:08:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't think this is just a rant as you say...
It's a simple direct poem. Of the evolution of a person as she grows older and she feels what she has strived to be for someone else is not what she's become...with no fault of her own but at the hands of the person she wanted so hard to impress...
could it be a parent or a long time lover?
"Battered and dying as a flower
by the wind and rain in the fall"
Perhaps if you put more lines like this your piece...
you will feel it's worth the rank of poem instead of rant...

Keep writing,
Swanne
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]


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