The Cellar by KrimsonReaper

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Submission Name: The Cellar dots

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Author:	KrimsonReaper
ASL Info:	26/M/Denver, CO
Elite Ratio:	4.61 - 328/443/46
Words:	86

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	243
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	600

Description:
Been quite a while for me. This just came out of nowhere tonight...

The Cellar dots

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harvest time has come again

the gloom is sleeping with me, like madness
some opposite of incandescence.
And the sweat of endless
tragedy
tempts all that is left
concede to the lullaby.
Like madness

This is the cry of tonight—this night.
This mind inside the stones, like
hearts
this love, hatred, fear
this fear.
This is the sound of his footsteps.
This is the insanity of days.
this fear—
the gloom is sleeping with me

harvest time has come again

Submitted on 2006-03-20 23:33:59 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is an interesting and thought provoking poem. I read it a few times as I had some difficulty understanding the meaning behind it as it could really be about many different things. I found this to be very well written and expressed and the biggest impression that it made on me was feeling overwhelmed. It had a cold kind of sensation to it as I read the words, even the title is cold and lonely. This could be of possible heartbreak, or frustration, or some sort of inner struggle in general. I think this is a good poem. It made me think and I am not sure if I got out of it what you intended but I enjoyed reading it. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
ummm. i love this.

with that said...what else is there to say??

all i can think to do with this,is,well...tell you my favortie parts. so...i hope you enjoy yourself as i attempt to flatter you...

"the gloom is sleeping with me, like madness"

i think this is one of my favorite lines in this whole piece. i think its just really strong. and i love it

"And the sweat of endless
tragedy"

i like that because well that could really pertain to anything. any kind of crisis worth worrying about to humankind. everyone knows what its like to "sweat" over things. whether they are something major or minor...its whatever problems us. we as humans have problems. gahh..lol..

i liked how you added "like madness" to the end of your first stanza...it kinda takes the whole stanza and brings it in within itself. it ties the whole thing together.

"This mind inside the stones"

i liked this line simply because it was appealing. it has a very poetic sense to it.

and i like how you kept going back to the word fear in your second stanza. it put an emphasis on it.

"he gloom is sleeping with me

harvest time has come again "

and here...i again like how you took the same lines from the first stanza and threw them in to the mix of your second. again tying the two together.

i think you did a great job on this...especially for this just "coming" to you...anyways. i think im gonna have to add this to my favorites! :-D
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]

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