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    dots Submission Name: Primeval Pawndots

    Author: weepingprophet
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 26/44/31
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ~A journey to the foot of choice where we all must take up our cross and pay recognition to our impoverished lives~weepingprophet

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    dotsPrimeval Pawndots

    The rains of October were gentle
    Seasoning the ground with entity
    Holding shade in the clouds
    Producing a primeval enemy

    Violent December tore at the earth
    Leaving ruin and rot
    Torrid and seeking for releif
    Begging to taste a life not yet bought

    March became the season of freedom
    A shallow puddle for play
    Keeping dry all the reasons
    Soon victim of shrivel and decay

    A tree strong, courageous and wethered
    Raised in the eye of a storm
    A cross to which many would be tethered
    Tugging lucidly at the disconsolate thorns

    Dissipating, shadowed by indecision
    Neglected, forsaken without care
    The intity raised by thunder's provision
    Screamed to its martyrs beware

    October's rains were oblivious
    To the primeval enemy's quest
    December's violence uncapable
    For abolition of the final test

    March becomes the season of payment
    Burdens shamed and withdrawn
    Sold to the world endless entertainment
    The soul is a king this life's just a pawn

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