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    dots Submission Name: Untill The Morrowdots

    Author: Noah
    ASL Info:    40/M/Iraq
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 26/44/8
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Again...written to my wife. Who I miss very much. 276 days to go!

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsUntill The Morrowdots

    Last night I came to you and fell without reservation into your embrace

    Your arms covered me like a soft blanket from my youth

    Nurtured and safe surrounded by your love

    Content, suckled with compassion

    Your voice echos from the darkness...

    Stir not my love from this embrace

    Go not into the cold and darkness

    Rest within my loving arms

    But I must relent I cry

    The dawn calls my name

    Give me your love to carry me through the day

    Lift me up to the heavens

    Let me be as if immortal

    Bring me to hearth and home

    Halved no more but whole

    Release me not to the wolves of the forest

    I reach for you in the dark

    But you pass through my fingers like wisps of air

    The sounds of the waking day have robbed me of your touch

    And so I must wait for the moon to bring you back to me

    When in your arms I may again sleep

    In loves slumber, until the morrow

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      I know how it is to long for somebody that you can not touch. And that can be a feeling that is hard to deal with at times. VERY HARD! Unfortunately...we are only 350 miles apart...not a country apart.....so I feel for you man! I really do!

    This poem was very evident on the emotions felt. And I can ever so much understand.

    I hope that you keep the faith every day. I hope that you hold onto what you know and never forget how pure it is. I know how easy it is to get frustrated and overwhelmed.

    This write was put together wonderfully. The double spacing kind of threw me off at first...but after I read a little deeper into the post....the double lines served it's purpost.

    Great job!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This just was so good. Again ,your use of imagery is so great and effective. Your flow was nice. I would break this inot stanzas to help this flow better. I think that your love and devotion showed through very clear, and it left the reader with a sense of longing as you have. Good write!

    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very well written, and besides the fact the you obviously have some talents in writing ...
    I think what made this extra special was the love you could read between the lines. You passion for you wife overflows into my heart.
    You are truly gifted...
    may u stay safe.

    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      first of all, let me say welcome to elite!

    Secondly let me say that with this kind of writing, you wont find it hard to find fans here.

    and finally, let me say that i think this was very lovely. My husband is often away from home, though not under the same circumstances as you are, and i can completely relate to this.
    Halved No More But Whole is something that people like you and me dream for. To love someone, to have that someone you love, and to be at opposite ends of the travelled road is difficult to accept sometimes...
    anyway, very touching
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      After I had read this I had to add it to my favorites. Wonderfully written. Your heart fills every word. At the end of the poem tears came to my eyes. I don't know I guess I feel that if I were to ever fall in love it would hurt to let that person go if even for a moment. I know that it must be done and that no matter what that loved one will always be there but still I can't help but think that no matter what I never want to let go of those I love. How do you do it? I guess duty calls or something of the other. I think you are strong not only for being a soldier but for letting go if only for a moment of the person you love. Well maybe you never did let go because she remains in your mind and in your heart forever. Wonderful poem. It was beautfilly written. I don't know what else to say except *bravo*. Welcoome to Eliteskills! You are a wondeful addition.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very touching poem. How romantic are your words and how difficult it must be to be so far away from her for so long. I am sure this will bring a warm smile to her face as well as a tear to her eye. My dad was in the military and away while I was young and I saw how my mom missed him everyday. I missed him everyday. It is these thoughts dreams that keep you going and knowing that your day will come when you can be with her again will give you the strength to get through everyday. A lovely heartfelt poem. Welcome to Elite! Take care of yourself.

    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem and I am sure that your wife will love it. The opening lines are beautiful especially the idea of the security blanket of youth but the transition from your embrace to hers seems confused, albeit, I recognise that this is a dream of a shared embrace.
    Take care
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]

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