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    dots Submission Name: love for approvaldots

    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
    Total Views: 743
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       its like speaking to a person who you know you will never get over.. it that feeling you get in the pit of your gut that knows you will love them... forever

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    dotslove for approvaldots

    i never really loved you anyway
    doest count when you still send shivers down my spine
    i was never going to let you in
    but you never left

    so are you still glamour
    everything that is pure and good
    never with a dagger through the heart of the beloved
    coming back around

    it tears through....
    i miss you terribly and i will leave everything just to cut myself again
    this taste is in my mouth
    why couldnt you just dissapear

    im sick of this routine
    its such a lovely colour for you though
    its heartbrake, i close my eyes, its killing me
    i didnt want to know

    Submitted on 2006-03-21 06:42:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got where you were going with this, it definately conveys your original reluctance to open up to them. I like the random nature of it, it just seems like it needs a bit more structure to help the random thoughts though, maybe punctuation would help. really liked the idea though, well done x (my favourite line, so are you still glamour, loved it!) x
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]

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